Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with?
As a social being, we are always surrounded by friends and families. We are born and grow up among these people, so they are very close to us. Some people believe that friends are the most influence on young people. However, I believe that family members are the ones who play a significant role in young people’s lives.
To begin with, our family always has a great impact on us to shape our future lives. Our parents always give us information about the rules and behaviors that are accepted in our community. This way we learn to behave in certain ways, and know the difference between good manners and mischief. Furthermore, relatives and parents teach us about the customs of our community. It is through thousands of life situations and family discussions that norms, values, customs, traditions, and expectations are passed down to the youngster. The depth of relationship developed over the years through shared joys and sorrows, place family members in a close bond, which cannot easily be replaced by friends or anyone else.
Furthermore, young children usually tend to take advices from their family members when they face with a dilemma in their lives. Family members are a good choice to take advices as they know us very well. They know our abilities, our weaknesses, and our desires. Moreover, parents and older relative have got more experiences during their lives and they have a broader horizon. In many circumstances, they can give us helpful advices based on situation and our abilities. When it comes to me, when I face with a puzzling situation, my father is the first person I try take his advices, because I believe in his wise and vision.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that friends may exert great influence on young adults. They spend lot of times with each other to study, to play or to take a trip. Moreover, they share their feelings, ideas, and experiences and involved each other in their decisions. However, they have a narrow horizon and cannot help each other in many situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many situations'.
Suggestion: many situations
...w horizon and cannot help each other in many situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86705202312 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60478231499 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526011560694 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0498049916 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164027161306 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595136119762 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102099169199 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114519778905 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07685570189 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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