Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults Which view do you agree with Use examples to support your position | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position..

When we are young adults, we are starting to get a taste of what is an adult’s life. In my point of view, when we are at this age, we are more influenced by our friends rather than our family, and I think like this, for a number of reasons that I will develop and explain in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, when we are younger adults, we already have lived some experiences, and we already know something, but, we still have to impress our friends and people that surround us. For example, when I was younger, 19 years old, I was usually influenced to use drugs, because, they were always offering me, and one time, I had the curiosity, and try it. For this reasons, I believe that young adults are more influenced by their friends.
Secondly, young adults usually, have more contact with their friends, rather than their family, and consequently, care more about what their friends thought about them. I also have a anecdote for this reason, when I was 20 years old, I used to go to parties all weekends, and I never stay at home with my family, consequently, I have more contact with my friends, and I usually did what they did.
Finally, when you are entering the adult life, you want to be independent, and for you, when less time that you pass with your family, more independent you are. Many younger adults, change their behavior when are with their friends, they are more funny, more intractable, and when they are with their family, they have completely another behavior, sometimes, been more kind, more sweet, and even more quiet.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e, I had the curiosity, and try it. For this reasons, I believe that young adults ar...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...friends thought about them. I also have a anecdote for this reason, when I was 20...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i think, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62093862816 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43685786845 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509025270758 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.7782369126 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.222222222 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7777777778 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150388392466 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794325032816 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451719806566 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997101677082 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215786064047 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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