Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with?
Life is a process that has different stages, and each individual starts to learn from the moment he comes to the world. This entire process ends when people die and during life, people are influenced by various persons and situations. Some say that young adults are influenced by their friends, others assert that the family has the greatest impact. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter one, because the family bond is stronger and because parents can be unconsciously persuasive. I will explain my reasons in the following essay.
First and foremost, the relationship between parents and children is unique, it is the strongest possible one. Furthermore, the family is the only who protects and love their children unconditionally. In other words, no matter what bad decision or mistake the young adults make, their parents are there to cover their back, to comfort them and to reassure that everything is going to be fine. Whereas friends are more prone to be judgemental and to betray your confidence. To continue, at young people are very envy, and they try to make themselves famous, even if this means to bully innocent people. For instance, back in college one of my friends thought it was cool to bully a newcomer, and she really hurt him. This particular friend tried to engage me in her hame but I refused because my parents told me that I must not hurt someone ever, at least not intentionally. This is a relevant example of when my parents' advice was beyond my friend's.
Second, parents are experienced, they have lived more and as a result, they know how to deal with different situations, they know how to approach their children and to explain what they believe to be correct or wrong. Moreover, many parents try to communicate with their offspring and they are doing researches for understanding how to speak with young adults because every generation has its own moral principles. This means that what was applicable to parents a few decades ago, it is not efficient at present. Sometimes parents even read books and talk to the specialists in order to find out how can they better communicate with children. Therefore, through childhood, parents build a relationship based on trust and young adults value their parents' opinions. For instance, back in my twenties, all the members of my entourage used to smoke, and I was the only one who refused to do it, even though my friends really tried to persuade me. This is because my parents talked to me about smoking, explaining the side-effects. However, they did not forbid me to smoke, and my parents added that this is my own decision, that I owe my body and as an adult, I am capable of taking a decision about this. Actually, I did not try because they way my parents approached this matter really touched me and made me feel capable of making good decisions.
To summarize, parents have the biggest influence on the young adults because they are the most trustful individuals and because parents have already experienced youth and its and their advice is valuable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, whereas, at least, for instance, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2532.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82285714286 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67688518351 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497142857143 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2215166303 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.086956522 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8260869565 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117482971544 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040585900981 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512993693838 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101332934123 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522198164379 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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