some people think that it is best for extended families (including grandparents, aunts and uncles, cousins, etc.) to live together. Other people think that is best for the nuclear family (parents and children only) to live away from the extended family. Which type of family living arrangement do you think is the most beneficial? Use specific reasons to support your response
In some culture, it is common to live together in the extended family (which includes grandparents, parents, cousins, uncles, and aunt), while in other cultures they prefer to live in a nuclear family which includes only parents and children. In my culture, we live together in the extended family. Living in the extended family has many benefits which are getting help from each other in daily works also it helps to maintain family traditions.
First of all, living in an extended family is beneficial because it helps family members with their day-to-day works. For example, when I was at school I was so busy with my studying because my major was science. I could not participate well in some works, so my cousins were helping me a lot in daily work. Consequently, I helped them with their school assignments and lessons. In addition to that, the extended family can also help members of the family in children raising. Back in my childhood, my parents had government jobs, so they were too busy and they could not find enough time to take care of me and my sister. My grandparents helped my parents in taking care of me. My grandfather raised me and the other boys in my family and help us a lot during our childhood with learning basic knowledge at school. My grandmother was taking care of girls whether my sister or cousins, because of them our parents had enough time for their jobs.
Secondly, living in an extended family can maintain family traditions, because grandparents can pass the family tradition to their young children. Then young children would transfer it to their children. In this way, we can easily keep and deliver our cultural tradition to our grandchild. For instance, I know about my origin and root because my grandparents told us about them when we were a child. They said our family moved from Poland to New York City and my grandfather name was Carson, that is why my full name is John Carson. Moreover, our ancient language was polish unfortunately I cannot speak it very well, but my grandparents can still speak it very well.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that living in the extended family is more beneficial than living in the nuclear family. Because we can get help from each other in the extended family whether it is helping in the daily task or in raising kids. Furthermore, the extended family saves family traditions and pass them to the next generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 817, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ith learning basic knowledge at school. My grandmother was taking care of girls wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78896882494 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61385827069 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443645083933 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8553113143 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0952380952 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09523809524 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272485096217 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10460832725 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102495414465 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229128084829 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12039416978 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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