No one can cast doubt on the fact that in the last few decades, the education system has changed drastically in which education has become the utmost priority for children. On that ground, considering its paramount importance, school organizations have been trying to improve ways whereby students could learn the best level of education. In this regard, some people contend that field trip is a very substantial way to provide education to students. On the other hand, another group of people considers it as an exaggeration and apparently, hold opinions in favor of traditional-style classroom studies. Admittedly, the former view contains more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that conducting a field trip aids students to gain overall knowledge, and so, their final grades in the exam. In fact, field trip always provides an enormous amount of practical exposure whereby students could learn a lot of practical things in real life. This exposure can be proved to life-memorable experience which is hard to forget in the whole life. On the contrary, the knowledge earned from academic books is really boring and unrealistic which students might forget in a short time. Drawing from my own example to shed light on what has been elaborated above. My school organized a historic trip on the Hiddapa culture, in my ninth grade. They took us to the land where the people of Hiddapa culture used to stay before five hundred years. It was a fascinating experience to know that being in lack of advanced technology, how those people lived gracefully, and the culture and rituals used by those dwellers. Later on, when questions were asked in my exam related to Hiddapa culture, I was able to write all the answers appropriately. Hence, had I missed the opportunity to go on the field trip, I might not have scored well in my history paper.
Another reason which deserves some words is that collecting the practical knowledge could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. To be more specific, students learn a lot of things on these trips. One of them is that they can have a vivid idea of how theoretical applications that they learn in the school could be applicable in the real field. Accordingly, this real-time experience can clear their theoretical doubts too. For instance, last year, when I was a freshman at university, I had studied a topic named solar plant energy in my science class. It was very hard to learn mathematical data and design in this topic. However, when I got an opportunity to visit a solar energy plant since my uncle works there, it enriched my view about the design of the solar plant and I learned that how solar energy is transformed into electric energy through huge solar machinery. Thereby, it is reasonable to say it is hard to grasp such theoretical knowledge without seeing the real field of work.
All in all, from contemplating all remarks, even though some may disagree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that field trips are crucial for efficient learning than staying in the class and solely reading books. Not only it boosts students’ academic knowledge for gaining the best marks in the exams, but also it gives them real exposure to what they study in their schools.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, apparently, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, well, for instance, in fact, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2828.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 573.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93542757417 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76996504315 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525305410122 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6315819791 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.769230769 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0384615385 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186216700635 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480730659183 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388595554457 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117216928413 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443804366272 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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