Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults Which one do you prefer

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Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which one do you prefer?

Is it true that older children should be required to take care of the younger children? When it comes to the question, the answer differs from individual to individual. Some are adamant that older children should be responsible for looking after the younger ones, while others hold squarely the opposite statement. Both statements are convincing and stand on points, yet my experience and real-life example lead me to conclude that the task of taking care of the young children should be done by parents and other adults. More reasons and examples will be shed light on as follows.
To begin with, taking care of the younger children needs money, and parents and adults have money. For example, when young children see the toys which they really want, they will cry and scream if parents are unwilling to buy. That is to say, parents or other adults should buy the toy to calm the children. However, it is impossible for older children which don’t have the ability of work to buy the toy, so younger children will lose calm, which cause the older hustle. Therefore, parents or adults are more suitable to take care of the younger.
In addition, the amount of company time is essential for children, and parents and adults have more time. For instance, the younger prefer someone play toys with them. To be more specific, parents and adults have sufficient time to accompany with children, because they don’t need to study after work. On the contrary, older children should prepare the test tomorrow and finish the assignments. Thus, it hasn’t enough time for them to play with younger.
Last but not least, young children should be disciplined by people with authority, and children don’t dare to defy their parents or other adults. Take my young brother as an example, when my parents take care of him, he is always show well-behaved appearance and has patience. Moreover, our culture teaches us that child should obey parents’ instruction. In contrast, when turn to me take care of my brother, he is difficult to discipline and lose patience. No matter what I say to him or what I want him to do, he has always expressed his impatience and unwillingness.
In conclusion, parents and other adults are responsible for taking care of young children. It is because budget, time and authority are pivotal for me to be considered.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'plays'.
Suggestion: plays
...or instance, the younger prefer someone play toys with them. To be more specific, pa...
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Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'showed', 'shown'.
Suggestion: showed; shown
... parents take care of him, he is always show well-behaved appearance and has patienc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88190954774 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54773497666 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477386934673 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7256131488 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3181818182 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.459431265222 0.236089414692 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153378290466 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118820955755 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273945357781 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910330758265 0.0645574589148 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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