Some people think that scientists make the most important contributions to society Other people think that the contributions of artists are the most important Which position do you agree with Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Some people think that scientists make the most important contributions to society. Other people think that the contributions of artists are the most important. Which position do you agree with? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Scientists and artists play crucial role in the development of a society according to their own skills and expertise. In my opinion, I think scientists make the most significant contribution to a society. In the following essay I intend to put forth my arguments to support my view.

To begin with, sceintists are the backbone of a country which means it helps their country to flourish. All the advancement in the medical field that we have are because of science and the researchers. Previously, people were not healthy and once they get an epidemic disease it led them to the death of a whole village. However, now every disease is curable and some of the deathly diseases has eradicated by these medical scientists. Therefore, people enjoy more healthy life and health of these people allow them to provide more success towards their country. For example, in the past the treatment for lung cancer was not possible which leads to higher mortality rate. However, now there are hundereds of lung cancer regimes discovered by these scientists which ameliorates people life. Now people live more longer and better life then before. Thus this example elucidates that the contribution of a scientist is more important.

In addition, an artist provides art that is of great importance for people which usually help them to familiarize with a culture and tradition. However, the work of a scientist contributes towards the betterment of a humanity. It is because of researcher that it diminishes the distances among their loved ones as the technology has globalized the world, that allow people to communicate. Also, people can video chat with each other which is half way meeting with the family. Moreover, advanced machines reduces the human work load that helps them to save their time. To exemplify, a calculator is a simple yet so friendly device for engineering students that helps to solve difficult questions. This would not have been possible without the scientist and their researches. Therefore, science researchers play more important role to a society than artists.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that the role of a scientist is prime than artists. This is because, they improves people life by bringing the best in the medical and health field, and because it contributes towards the betterment of humanity in various ways.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11197916667 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78411481474 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5234375 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5073935603 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.2272727273 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4545454545 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263236059372 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707061028151 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642186291281 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149675086098 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421005587082 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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