Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

This topic raises the controversial issue of whether young adults should live with their families or not. As per Mr Karvin, Adult should live like a bird."It means that adult should after attaining the major age, should live independently. Personally, I disagree with the persons who think that young adults should live their families. I feel this for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.

To begin with, Young adults should know the meaning of expense and income and this is possible only when adults live independently. Let us look at the metaphor of my personal experience. My family prefers that young adult should live their families for a longer time. Due to such thinking my brother, after attaining the major age, do not know the various different situations where one can make a less expense. The reason is all the matters related to finances are dealt with by my parents, Thus my brother didn't have an idea related to how to make less expense.

In addition, Through independence young adults knows the actual meaning of life-skills. Let us look at the instance of Monk Vidyaacharya. Monk Vdyaaharya comes from south India, lives in the prosperous family still he wants to learn about life-cycle(Skills). He decided at the age of 20 to live life independently. This new life gave him a meaning of different theories and one of the theory is life-cycle( skills) .i.e. How to manage life effectively with no pain. Thus, this shows that independency helps us to solve various theories.

In conclusion, although Some young adults achieve their personal goals while living with their families. However, Generally, it is seen that such adults are not able to manage their life practically after the death of their family members. As per Monk Shistacharya," People should know how to tackle the different situations". It means people should know the different situations and also knows how to tackle this and this is possible only through independency and not through dependency.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, still, thus, while, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07207207207 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90260707477 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507507507508 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7934944726 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8947368421 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345781042607 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123633274325 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127269592917 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220796047681 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662248262179 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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