Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People have showed interest in sports since ancient times because it represents a good way to have fun and spend leisure time. At present, children spend a lot of time for doing sports, which can be beneficial or not. This is due to the fact that while sports is recommended for a good health, sometimes it can distract kids from other significant things. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, doing sports, especially from an early age is efficient in preventing children to become obese. Unfortunately, nowadays kids have bad habits when it comes for food because there are various tasty unhealthy foods. Moreover, according to international statistics, the number of children who suffer from obesity is progressively increasing. However, physical activities is a good method to burn calories, thus these are helpful for a wealthier life. For instance, my neighbor's daughter had some extra kilos and they decided to send her to a dance club. In a year she managed to lose ten kilograms, and she looked like a normal ten year old girl. Additionally, she became more active and had more energy. So, sports are efficacious to maintain a proper body weight.
On the other hand, children might prefer doing sports to studying, and as a result this can affect their future. While there are some talented children who can start a sport career, most of kids have no special skills in this field. In addition, if they start to neglect school there can be consequences as punishments and interdiction both from school and parents. My friends experience is a compelling example. Back in high school he used to be a brilliant student, especially at math. But he also liked to play volleyball and he became a part of the school team. Actually, he wanted to become one of the popular guys, and this was not possible if he acted as a nerd. After a while, his grades had gradually decreased and his parents forbade him to play volleyball. Conversely, he did not listen to them, and he secretly played volleyball. One day they won a local contest and team's picture was in newspapers, and his parents saw it. When confronted he lied and got punished for three months.
To summarize, sports offer advantages and disadvantages for kids. From one point of view, it can be beneficent for children's health, but the same time these activities can negatively interact with school, and consequently with their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'girl' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'girls'.
Suggestion: girls
...d she looked like a normal ten year old girl. Additionally, she became more active a...
^^^^
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the kids') or simply say ''most kids''.
Suggestion: most of the kids; most kids
... children who can start a sport career, most of kids have no special skills in this field. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ame time these activities can negatively interact with school, and consequently w...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90314769976 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76673984269 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581113801453 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8932614012 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.52 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119695000648 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030957017226 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395384480557 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804530919427 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030402718673 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.