Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1. to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2. learning to play a sport
3. learning to play a musical instrument
In some educational systems, more students have free time between the semester, and it can be beneficial for them. Besides, a vast number of them fill their free time with a part job or some activities regard to the charity. However, it may not be as entertainment; it has its value from the social and economic facet, which is so vital for a person should attend in society. This essay attends to examine two of these factors for the student.
In the first step, in my idea, participating in charity activities has been considered with a vast number of families. Some families encourage their children to help others in free time. Moreover, society needs this type of work. Particularly, in the summer student and peers can learn admirable work like helping to construct some building for poor people with obeying pay or cash. This matter has a direct positive impact on society. For instance, in England, some organizations invite students and young people to attend to clean nature and the environment. Nonetheless, many people never participate in some kind of event. As a result, it is very holy to keep the sense of helping to poor and it reshapes our characteristics.
I believe that one of the advantages of having a part job from an economic aspect can guide the student on how to find an appropriate job for them. A way of explanation, Obama’s girl has been a vital example of a girl who is working in summer at the mini fast-food. In addition, two factors for working student is crucial. Especially, income and experience would be counted in the major context for them. Although, this rate and volume of the money may not be great. So, from my point of view, each student can exert experience and use for the future.
Additionally, something is clear in my mind about playing the game and go to some classes in the summer. There is an extensive advantage is behind this fact, and students can gain a variety of skills in this kind of class. Nevertheless, having a little income and significant experience are very major for the student in the future. For example, working in a restaurant or accounting is a series of activities that have an advantage in the social and economic perspective.
In conclusion, participating in the same jobs between the semester so vital for students and it encourages them to have a successful role in their job. Because they gain something in the past. In addition, from the social vision, they have admirable characteristics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to have a successful role in their job. Because they gain something in the past. In add...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80327868852 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85861481644 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489461358314 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1038687327 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.04 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202003746385 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547161349965 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464011118877 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114982014743 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254928417453 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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