Sometimes we are assigned to work in a group on a project. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The group will be helped more by the person who will be willing to do what other group members want than by the person who often strongly insists that things should be done in a way that is different from what the group wants to do.
In the rapidly changing environments of science, no tasks can be done by a single person. Collaboration and having respect for the other group members' ideas is an important factor that plays a crucial role in succeeding every group. Some are inclined toward the opinion that each member in a group can work separately and impact on the group's results. Actually, the group will be helped more by these persons. On the other extreme of the rope, others deeply believe that all members should consider others’ ideas and viewpoints and not insist that others obey them. While both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I definitely think that the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons.
As the first and paramount reason, if group members pay attention to others' points and advice, all members can talk about various subjects and their experiences without any limitation; thus, they learn each other and develop their knowledge and expand their horizons. Subsequently, they accomplish every project and achieve the best goals. For instance, some master students in a university studied several factories that had been consisted of different groups. The obtained result showed that the groups that their members always worked together closely had both more efficiency and higher performances in processing different tasks. Their members had a good and constructive relationship and discussed various subjects and tried to teach each other new and practical concepts. This collaboration and solidarity helped them think about various issues effectively and deal efficiently with several problems in order to find viable solutions. No one strongly insisted that things should be done according to his/her ideas and viewpoints. Because he/she knew that without other group members' proposals and advice, he/she couldn’t acquire new insights and valuable experiences. Therefore, the success of a group in completing any project depends on synchronizing members’ ideas with others.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is, paying attention to others' ideas and advice in a group can show that their roles are undeniable and thoughts that are valuable have positive and influential impacts. Hence, group members put a lot of effort to improve their performances and do everything properly and efficiently. My personal experience is a good example to illustrate this. About two years ago, I was a manager of the quality control department of a company where ten engineers worked together in order to produce some initial products. My group members and I always talked about new techniques in production and tried to research and propose comprehensible ideas and optimal solutions. I had a lot of respect for them and considered their viewpoints and paid attention to their efforts and performances. Consequently, these treats encouraged them to analyze all positive and negative aspects of different issues and to try hard to find pragmatic approaches and solve the group’s problems.
In conclusion, considering and paying attention to other group members' ideas not only help them present their viewpoints and develop their knowledge but also encourage them to try hard to obtain remarkable achievements.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 13.8261648746 275% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2798.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44357976654 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89086204747 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525291828794 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 843.3 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5349703984 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.583333333 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269100209969 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854130931672 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671721208881 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175807262563 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996744827422 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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