Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
When someone talks about a successful person we only discuss the hard work that man must have put in to be in such a place. We forget that there are many other factors that have equal if not more influence in his success i.e, his friends who motivated him, his teacher who showed me the right path, etc. However, when we consider influence, I personally feel friends have a bigger role than teachers. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, teachers interaction with the student is limited to only class hours. He is not involved in a child's everyday life compared to how much his friends are. Moreover, the student-teacher relationship is more formal than the relationship he has with his friends. He can't go to the professor and talk about anything which he can with his friends. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school some 5 years ago, I went through a very difficult breakup because of which I went into depression and wasn't able to concentrate on my studies and scored poorly on my midterm exams. My then physics teacher called me into her office to discuss my poor grades but, I could not tell her what I was going through. Compared to which, I was completely comfortable to express my emotions in fronts of my best friend and because of that was finally able t overcome that period. Had I not opened up in front of my friends my situation would have gotten worse.
Furthermore, your friends belong to the same age group in which you are and because of that, they can understand your situation better. Sometimes there are some situations which are insignificant in front of an adult but have a big value in your life. Friends can understand this better. For instance, my older brother wanted to go on an adventure trip but when he asked his teacher for a leaving certificate from school she refused and said as I quote "studies are more important than this trip". Knowing his teacher's response my parents refused to fund his trip. However, my brother's friends combined all the little money they had and funded his trip. Now, he is a very successful adventure sports guide. His friends could see his passion for it which even his teacher could not.
In conclusion, even though teachers have a very big role in influencing students, but not as big as friends have.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63981042654 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60616540362 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53317535545 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7192417486 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1818181818 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118202219822 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384181934747 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617164559764 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787070264388 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015349005624 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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