For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school
Although it can be argued that well education is important to be successful in your future job, I disagree that it is more important than having good relate with people. Three reasons persuade me to put forward this opinion. First of all, one of the vital elements of a successful job is to have a good connection with your coworker; moreover, decent communication with the client is the other factors of a successful business, and finally, a person how is skillful in making speech can easily deliver her opinion.
First of all, it is very important to have good network toward the employees in the office; in this situation, they can easily convey their opinion, exchange their idea which can make them think more sufficiently. They can be more creative and make the wide range of solution whenever to face the problems. In this condition, it is rare to be unsuccessful, because they well have cooperation instead of competition which is more useful in the business.
Moreover, the professional employee is one who talented at communication with clients. The first base in any business is the satisfaction of the clients; in this condition, good communication with clients, which satisfy them for your function can consider as one of the basic factors to be successful in your job. So, if the person has the ability to relate with clients, make them be satisfied by her function, it can be considered as a successful business.
Finally, from my point of view, one who can easily deliver her idea is successful. Maybe, you have the best education, you study in the best university, moreover you have creative mind for any problem or situation; if you cannot present them well, it can be defined as nothing; because that idea seems good in your mind and no one else can find them as important and useful as you can. They are just useful and fantastic in your mind. However, if you are able to present well, you can deliver a simple idea as a unique idea in your job.
To recap, although good education is important in your future job, I believe that abilities to relate with people come first; because, you can have good communication with your partner in the office, you can well present your idea, and finally you are able to satisfy your clients.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.169683257919 0.229887763892 74% => OK
Verbs: 0.147058823529 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0972850678733 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0610859728507 0.046263068375 132% => OK
Pronouns: 0.101809954751 0.0685040099705 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.126696832579 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0158371040724 0.0351676179071 45% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.67706468798 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027149321267 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.079185520362 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0339366515837 0.0209618222197 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158371040724 0.0139019557991 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2276.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 392.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80612244898 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321428571429 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186224489796 0.174417080927 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109693877551 0.112833075102 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67706468798 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426020408163 0.524397521467 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.7067234178 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.8544092743 48.84282405 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.571428571 120.699889404 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.642857142857 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 53.0 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.00729927007 1.45489161554 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358428454098 0.300154397459 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.181420514815 0.103427244359 175% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.12475362501 0.0752933317313 166% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.624783022225 0.497263757937 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.218393564921 0.151897553556 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163947943111 0.114077575197 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092651776007 0.0781384742642 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.390676802394 0.336927656856 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0736946895657 0.067059652881 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254860631742 0.210909579961 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594898878658 0.0618886996521 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.