For success in a future job, the ability of relate well topeople is more important than studying hard in school.

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For success in a future job, the ability of relate well to
people is more important than studying hard in school.

Certainly, studying hard in school enables us become stronger, leading to rising the possibility of success for future career. However, people connection always helps us solve difficulties and reduce unwanted efforts on our positions. Therefore, it is exceedingly obvious that the ability is more important than studying hard in school.
Relating well to powerful and famous people helps our career. Nowadays, it is fairly competitive for people to apply for a valuable job successfully. However, sometimes no matter how excellent a person is, he cannot compete against a candidate who has power background. For example, my brother graduated from a famous and prestigious university. When he applied for a job as an accountant in a big company, his competitor was the son of the CEO. Obviously, he failed, even though my father was extremely wonderful and his competitor was generic. In reality, it is an exceedingly common phenomenon, which happens to all kinds of companies.
Having relationships with people from different area can help us get through difficulties in career. The efficiently and successfully we deal with problems, the quickly and helpfully we achiever success in career. For example, once a time, my father’s company suffered a crisis on financial situation. Thanks to the good relationship with his cooperative firms, he was allowed to own the money and my father’s company was also invested by some familiar firms. Therefore, my father’ company could get through this serious difficult and gradually become bigger. Without the help of these people connection, we father’ company would bankrupt and my father would lose a lot.
Surely, when studying hard in school, we are likely to acquire a verity of knowledge and abilities. These makes us more confident and advantageous when we apply for a better position. If we are knowledgeable and have different capabilities, we would not rely on others and only depend on ourselves when we get into trouble. Besides, asking someone for help with career, this means we own others’ favor, which is difficult to return. On the contrary, solving the problems of jobs or getting promotion independently does not be concerned about these issues. With the assistance of other people, it is relatively helpful for our success in career.
In a word, although we are not good at study, we can cultivate the ability of relating to others, which might do good for our future career. We are able to acquire promotion and cope with problem easily. without the ability of relating well to others, we probably lack important connection with someone who can give support and aid to our career.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...promotion and cope with problem easily. without the ability of relating well to others,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22325581395 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97414857767 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53023255814 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0034664163 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.84 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244907246664 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752523281462 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098259837904 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15771867202 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109642546011 0.0645574589148 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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