For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.

It is widely accepted that education is a necessary element in improving a country. As some people may hold the view that for the successful development of a country, it is vital for a government to spend money on the education of the very young children; however, some others may take a different viewpoint which government should spend money on universities. As far as I am concerned, I personally agree with second belief. Among myriad reasons which can support my idea, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.

First and foremost, education is very controversial topic, especially universities' education. In my opinion, the students at universities are more mature than the young children. The have opted for ways of success long before entering universities. They see the university as a opportunity to aim higher and become pioneer on different fields. Thus, it is the best chance for government to invest on university students who are underpinning of society in close future. Beside of that, children at age five to ten years old are too independent on their parents and their choice are directly influenced by their parents. In addition, the young adults as students are ambitious to reach the peak. Based on these, I personally thinks universities are better choices to spend money. For example, when I was child, I literally had not any plan for future. Until when I have come into university, I found the way to success and facilities of university which were provided by government, helped me to reach my goals.

Second reason, one should take into account this significant that universities have higher priority of money rather than children. Because most of the researches in the universities are much more expensive than teaching children who have aged five to ten years old. Furthermore, universities' researches often have a financial efficiency which leads to revenue and finally income for government. By this way, I think, it could be plausible reason for government to spend money on universities. For instance, last year, university gave us budget on data science project. After six months, we gave it back the money as a revenue of our project. Beside of that, our project have helped the banks to analyze their data better than before.

To wrap it up all the aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that based upon the today's lifestyle. Universities' students are more mature than children and higher priority of money for universities are couple of my main reasons which support my idea. Actually there are some other reasons and examples advocate the claim which is not mentioned above. By and large I highly recommend the government should allocate more money on universities' education.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...overnment should allocate more money on universities education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, by and large, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10021786492 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91023342111 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498910675381 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0409990804 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.64 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.36 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407515722896 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102212071125 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103221866653 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256902652222 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701164860657 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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