For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.

In the modern era, education is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the thriving of a country in various aspects. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the question of where should be the main focus of the government to invest the budget to facilitates the education system. Many people adhere to the view that the money should be invested in kids, while others believe that spending it on universities would bring more prominent benefits to the community. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that we have to pay attention to the higher levels of educations. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that having high-tech universities is an intriguing factor drawing the attention of the public to continue their studies. Having a plethora of educated work-force enables the country to increase its productivity in assorted facets. Consequently, the invested money will be returned to the government in the long term. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am a student at the University of Tehran which is the best university in Iran and receives considerable amounts of attention from various industries. The students who study here have an enormous potential of working in famous firms because they have been trained by experts using up-to-date teaching materials. As a result, these students can be used in different areas to satisfy the requirements of a country and reduce its dependence on expensive services from its rival nations.

Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that by investing in universities, we can also attract top-notch students from other countries. Providing convenient amenities, they will become inclined to pursue their studies in our schools. As a result, using them in our laboratories can increase the speed of technological and industrial progress. For instance, students of some countries tend to migrate to another country in order to continue their illiteracy process because they provide a better environment for bright students. As a result, the destination country can utilize the massive potential of an incoming crowd of scholars to expand the borders of scientific realms.

In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that concentrating on adults' education yields to more beneficial outcomes. This is because our teenage population becomes more eager in attending to the collages, and we can attract experts from other nations to facilitate the growth of our factories.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ith the question of where should be the main focus of the government to invest the budget ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...one soon realizes that concentrating on adults education yields to more beneficial out...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, while, as to, for instance, in brief, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22716627635 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00120179882 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550351288056 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9623601314 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.473684211 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0922937859382 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267344117722 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372748735078 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0546011195703 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204922622117 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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