Technology made our children less productive.
Nowadays, it is quite straightforward that we can not imagine our lives without utilizing recently developed technology. I assume that, this innovation has changed our daily lives. Some people can consider this modification as positive, but others, such as skeptics, may accept it as a negative change in their life. To my mind, the development of technology has helped us tremendously, and it is biased to say that it has its own drawbacks. Moreover, I consider the use of technology, especially by children, as a very beneficial concept, and this concept will increase their creativity.
Firstly, we need to comprehend that by using this technology, we can increase our knowledge, and general skill to its climax stage. Moreover, when children use modern technology, they can get enormous information from the world. Consequently, this concept will be an adequate source of inspiration, and extra knowledge. Based on my own experience, when I was a child, I utilized technology quite often, and by doing so, I significantly improved my mindset, and my creativity. The way in which I developed myself is by using internet, and getting abundant amount of new information from the world. I assume that with this method, every living human can obtain enormous amount of new techniques in their field, and this new information will help them to enlarge their outlook, and creativity. Therefore, I consider it being very beneficial for people, specificly for children.
Secondly, we need to acknowledge the fact that in the past, it was very challenging to produce an adequate level of creativity, with the minority of educational success. Additionally, to my mind, in the past, the educational system was pretty poor. However, in contemporary world, our educational methods are much more superior than past , in which the quantity of knowledge was very low. I consider that with the new technology, we can provide children with abundant amount of knowledge and creativity in the educational centers. Consequently, with the difference of this concept, we can easily accept the fact of superiority of creativity in contemporary world.
In conclusion, I assume that conversely, the development of technology has improved our children's ability of thinking in a much more abstract way, thus they are getting much more creative.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[2]
Message: The adjective more is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: 'superior to'.
Suggestion: superior to
...world, our educational methods are much more superior than past , in which the quantity of knowled...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...methods are much more superior than past , in which the quantity of knowledge was ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25876010782 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14419500826 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487870619946 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6055637905 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.388888889 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115711982194 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406417078266 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391179668913 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915877694598 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410522092879 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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