TOEFL essay:A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go a vacation or buy a car,you friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use .

In terms of ethics, people are different to each other, actually their behavior are different too. Thus, some of them are misery and thrifty. These people just think about future also, they don’t like to pay money several time for all trifle things, the other one are generous and just enjoy their life without any storing money.in my opinion, if my friends received some money, he should go on vacation around the world.

First, when somebody find huge money, the logical way is storing half of it in bank and then buy a thing that he likes it very much and he has some schedule to buy it, for some people is buying their favorite and expensive car, is a, enormous dream. They actually like to have luxurious car like as black Ferrari or orange Bugatti to show off to other and proud themselves. Last year my boyfriend win in lottery and he bought a red Bugatti, by the way that was a fabulous feeling on that time.

Second, some people are stingy and they just think when they received huge money the better way is do not waste in traveling when they buy something as a car, it has own price and if they need that money they can sell it. For example, my father never goes on travel but, he always buys gold and car or he investments his money on differences company to increase his money up.

Third, going on vacation has lots of advantages like as finding new friends and submit lots of memory that never forgot it, and experiences to camping in natural places, is like as waking up in heaven in middle of wonderful sights of the world. Actually, traveling to different countries is exciting to know about different cultures and people. For example, in 2016, I traveled to Kenya, and that was the perfect vacation I’ve ever had. The weather always blurs, and we couldn’t see our way. We should confine our steps and have caution. also, one of our member team was jolly person and made all of us to laughter.

In conclusion, people have different tact about how enjoying their life. some people drown in make money and their own business and the other one decided to traveling around the world whole time of their life.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'several times'.
Suggestion: several times
...also, they don't like to pay money several time for all trifle things, the other one ar...
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Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...ound the world. First, when somebody find huge money, the logical way is storing ...
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Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'a'?
...ng their favorite and expensive car, is a, enormous dream. They actually like to h...
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Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...y received huge money the better way is do not waste in traveling when they buy so...
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Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ow about different cultures and people. In conclusion, people have different tac...
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Line 9, column 28, Rule ID: DIFFERENT_TACT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'different tack'?
Suggestion: different tack
...ople. In conclusion, people have different tact about how enjoying their life. some peo...
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Line 9, column 74, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...ent tact about how enjoying their life. some people drown in make money and their ow...
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Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...und the world whole time of their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, then, third, thus, for example, in conclusion, by the way, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60479041916 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24863654451 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538922155689 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.4136337568 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.166666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8333333333 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142038946292 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472162024243 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516032740613 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806431158904 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414451537153 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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