Some people believe that success of an individual depends only on his/her hard work. While many others are of the belief that luck plays an important role in the success of people. If I were forced to choose, I definitely believe that luck plays a crucial role in determining one's success. I firmly believe in this opinion due to several reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, luck and hard work combined, more often than not, results in successful outcomes in an individual's life. It is very important for various aspects to go in favor of a person, in order for him to be successful at any task. Since, a person can't control everything, he/she must have some luck to have a favorable outcome, and hence, it is important for people to understand that some things are out of their control and should accept any outcome, irrespective of success or failure. Take for example, the two cases of Sachin Tendulkar and Vinod Kambli, both of whom were prolific sportsmen of their time. They both went on to represent India in the game of Cricket, but, only Sachin was considered an all time great, and Vinod had a very short career. It is important to make note of an incident which took place during June, 1980, when India were supposed to play against South Africa. Before this series, both Sachin and Vinod, had not performed well in the previous matches, but, the selectors decided to give Sachin another chance, and Vinod was kicked out of the team for his poor performances. In this case, Sachin had luck on his side, and went to create many milestones from that series onwards, but Vinod failed to make a comeback. Therefore, this incident throws light on the importance luck plays in one's success. If Sachin did not have luck on his side that day, he may not have represented the country again.
Secondly, people's fortune or riches are useful for determining the success of a person. Many businesses have a lot of money invested in various areas or different fields. An investment banking firm will invest the money of their shareholders in various companies in the stock market. Stock market is an area where prices are very volatile and thus, it is important for people to invest at the right time. In such cases, luck plays an important role, despite the fact that the company would have done proper research on their investments. Drawing from my own experiences, my father was the CEO of a multi-national investment banking company. He was very successful in his field of work and, became the CEO through his hard work and efforts. However, during the 2007 stock market crash in the US, his company lost all their money invested in the various companies, and my father was fired from his job after the incident. Since, luck wasn't on his side, he lost his fortunes made over the years and his job. This incident, thus, helps us understand the importance of luck in the success of people.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I firmly believe that luck plays an important role, along with hard work, in determining the success of individuals since, various elements are out of people's control and their luck during that time determines their success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2655.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75806451613 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49094208314 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467741935484 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6511671565 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.2 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.32 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124804495327 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433940807317 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494402858107 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103731071316 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420263099278 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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