[TPO 01] Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to supp

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[TPO 01] Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that sports and social activities are equally important as classes and libraries. However, in my opinion, classes and libraries are more important for university students than other social activities. This is because of the students’ future life and the importance of the environment around them.

To begin with, classes and libraries are helpful for students’ future careers. When they graduate from university, they should have their own job. Aiming to get a great future job, the exam grade and educational activities are highly effects for students’ job applications. By using classes and libraries, students can focus on studying and reading professional books or papers. For example, the one who get good grades and get many positive comments from professors is more preferred from the company than the one who didn’t get good educational results in the university. The good results in exams and classes show that the students are well-behaved and consistent person.

On top of that, the surroundings are important for studying. According to the research from US top 5 university states that about eighty-five percent of the students said the libraries and other quiet places are more preferred for focus on studying. The condition of the places where students are studying is really important for their concentration level. More quiet and comfortable places like libraries and classes are more welcomed for students’ to focus on their own studies or papers, however it is difficult to focus on café or other public places because there are so many distractions. The concentration level highly affects the quality of the study which directly affects their exam. Compared to these, sports and social activities are less needed concentration which means that more financial support for classes and libraries is recommended.

To sum up, the libraries and classes are important for students because it highly affects their future career and the importance of those places are higher than the places for social activities. In this regard, I think more financial support for libraries and classes because it is really important for students’ educations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
Suggestion: the surrounding environment
...apos; future life and the importance of the environment around them. To begin with, classes and librar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, well, for example, i think, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47521865889 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95703580009 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443148688047 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7429378062 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.470588235 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1764705882 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154424301306 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704659685468 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643266603318 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124815216557 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521924785397 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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