TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Frankly speaking, I disagree with the statement that sports and social activities should gain as much support as classes and libraries. Students will be easily distracted and misled by too much social activities since they are not mature enough. A university should create an academic atmosphere because it is the highest educational institution. Furthermore, financial support is always limited, which means there should be a preference on how to use it more effectively.

First, university students are at a critical stage of their life where their personal value and view of the whole world is establishing gradually so that they are sensitive, and easy to be misled. Too much activities would occupy their time and distract them from what they should be doing. Many students do not have the strong mind to refuse. They just take in all the information and attend all the activities they can attend and get lost when they cannot get their priority straight. More time should be engaged in studies and researches in terms of being university students.

Secondly, university should create an academic atmosphere for students and faculty. A good university stay atop because of its academic performance rather than how attracting their social activities are. A certain number of activities would be fun but too much is overwhelming. Some universities possess the most advanced and accurate equipment, striving to make huge contribution to the development of entire human-beings. The administrator of the university should highlight the significance of academic studies and make sure the environment is suitable for students to delicate themselves.

Moreover, financial support is always limited. the university must guarantee that the support is going to where they should be going regarding the wish of stakeholders. More support for sports and social activities mean less for classes and libraries. University should well organize the use of the financial support to figure out the balance between academic studies and social activities so that the benefit of the support can be maximized.

To sum up, academic research should be the priority of both the students and the university. Students should broaden their horizon and discover their own value of the world while university should create an academic and supportive environment to make sure these individual and collective developments happen. University administrators should take well-balanced advantage of the financial support as the result of the limitation of the support.

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Average: 7.2 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...e sensitive, and easy to be misled. Too much activities would occupy their time and ...
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Line 7, column 48, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...r, financial support is always limited. the university must guarantee that the supp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, frankly, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4582278481 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9808403831 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481012658228 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4538028696 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218815272663 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796898294593 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608726248416 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146654684692 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598396937975 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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A good university stay atop
A good university stays atop

flaws:
No. of Words: 395 while No. of Different Words: 192

We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

why the words are not used efficiently? because you put reasons in the introduction and conclusion both. It will create duplicated content. So in the introduction, we can simply use 'The reasons go as follows'. while in the conclusion, we paraphrase a very simple summary of reasons.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 2108 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.337 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.692 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Yes, you can use some templates/samples/books at the beginning and once you got ideas, have your own styles.

for any templates, users in testbig are asked to write 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.