TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is axiomatic that friends play an importance role in our life. In addition, human beings have been bestowed with an irreplaceable gift, friendship. There is a fantastic quote about friends and relationship which I want to cite here is: “True friends are those rare people who came to find you in dark places and lead you back to the light”. On the whole, it is my opinion that keep in touch with old friends can be more rewarding instead to replace with new ones. I feel this way for several main reasons. Indeed, I believe that my old friends could control my some uncanny behaviors in society and also could give me an appropriate advice.

Firstly, we spend most of the time with our close friends in varied situation such as party, friends gathering and also special ceremony. As for several striking situations which profoundly could affect our futures which proper interaction with other peoples needed miscellaneous skills and in these moments our old friends -who knows my characteristics in more detail- give me good correction and also notification how to behave in these situation to keep on through the ethical manners to raise and sustain my best performances in my personal and professional situations. In contrast, new friend maybe not aware of our mode or also our characteristics which this misconception lead us into jeopardize situation. For instance, I, personally, witnessed quite a few situation that my friends did not forget to control their humor’ characteristic and one of my friend start to make a joke which targeted religious, meanwhile, one of my friend how is a believer was in this room and I know that that joke would deeply hurt him – religious man- emotionally, and meantime, according to my previous conception and knowledge I interrupt his joke and implicitly deliver him this message that it’s not an appropriate topic for this group, and end, he thanked me for what I did deliberately.

Secondly, I think it’s important to have feedback loop, and organized concomitant advice on our behavior, where you are constantly thinking about what you have done and how you could be doing it better. Not only is my old friend reliable, but also he is authentic. It is axiomatic that how spend most of the time with you in different situation from happiness till sadness ones, would definitely could give you best estimation of your situation rationally and evidently. Recently, I read an interesting books about relationship and advice; as for there are a lot of studies which mostly implicated that people highly accept the advice from their close friends. For instance, when we would like to buy a cloth for any party of ceremony we ask close friends to accompany us in this activities. This phenomenon shows that part of our decision is contingent on our friend’s decision. In this regards, keeping old friends is a definitive decision that in long term give us several benefits that we cannot find in new friends.

To recapitulate, as for my personal experiences and keeping old friends could probably is first choose for me to replace with new one based on to address some barrier in my behavior to alleviate my inconvenience in especial ceremony of events and also to ease my decision in regular basis.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 632, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'appropriate advice'.
Suggestion: appropriate advice
...viors in society and also could give me an appropriate advice. Firstly, we spend most of the time...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
... and also notification how to behave in these situation to keep on through the ethical manners ...
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Line 3, column 762, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'few situations'.
Suggestion: few situations
...tance, I, personally, witnessed quite a few situation that my friends did not forget to contr...
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Line 3, column 1148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n and knowledge I interrupt his joke and implicitly deliver him this message that...
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Line 3, column 1294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thanked me for what I did deliberately. Secondly, I think it's important to...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'you the best'.
Suggestion: you the best
...dness ones, would definitely could give you best estimation of your situation rationally...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'book'?
Suggestion: book
...dently. Recently, I read an interesting books about relationship and advice; as for t...
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Line 5, column 781, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...we ask close friends to accompany us in this activities. This phenomenon shows that ...
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Line 5, column 894, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ngent on our friend's decision. In this regards, keeping old friends is a defin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, as for, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2731.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96545454545 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90931192342 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501818181818 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.412235084 48.9658058833 270% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 151.722222222 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5555555556 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72222222222 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164186606648 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641085297118 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419707126535 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114757645576 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403007959761 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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