TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The amount of time people consume for their work is a crucial factor in job satisfaction which always has been a heated argument. In this regard, some people bring up this opinion that it is more enjoyable to have a 3-weekday job with longer hours instead of working four days a week. In my opinion, these are two choices, containing both advantages and disadvantages that its selection may vary depending on the conditions people are involved in.

First, a three days a week job leads to an interesting upside which is having more leisure time on weekends thanks to a new day added to it. Indeed, in this system, people find more time in their weekends and can spend most if not all of their leisure time with their family and enjoy each other's company. For instance, they can take a trip in a 4 days holiday, which is not the case for a job with five days a week. Furthermore, employees in this system have more time to refresh themselves, causing the number of irreparable mistakes in workdays will far significantly decrease. Therefore, both business owners and employees can derive some benefits from the system of working three days a week.

Second, other groups of people state that the benefits of working 3 days a week are premised upon this idea that work for long hours is not irritating. They contend that if employees worked long hours in a day, they would be really exhausted and it can be clearly understood that they would feel their job is utterly dull and may give it up. Furthermore, there will be less time to spend with family members when people work longer hours on weekdays. What kind of feel children experience if they have less chance to see their parents?

In conclusion, given the aforementioned examples, I subscribe to this opinion that different people could enjoy either a 3-days-a-week job or a 4-day-days-a-week one according to their preferences and the situation they are exposed to.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...e time with their family and enjoy each others company. For instance, they can take a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77844311377 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71161633274 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520958083832 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.7575573375 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.769230769 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0301875294355 0.236089414692 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0138592025584 0.076458572812 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159519261416 0.0737576698707 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0185025172975 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016379524702 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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