TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Friends are most important part of our life and precious gift of god. We spend our most of time with friends and friendship is the only relationship on the earth, that we choose by our self in comparing to other relation(like parents, siblings etc.) which are given by god. I strongly believed that it's important to keep you old friends rather than making new friends. I feel this like for two reasons which explore in my essay:

First of all, trust between two people build over a period of time and therefore trust between two old friends are stronger than new friends. We can easily share our problems with the old friends rather than old friends because we trust him. For example, in my case whenever I am despondent or unhappy due to some reasons than I can share my problems easily with my old friends because i know he understand me and give me the right solution to come out of that. i trust him and know that he never expose my personal things to other. But it's difficult to open up on your personal matters and problems with new friends.

In addition to that, old friend know my strength and weakness very well. He can guide me in right direction. He understand in which situation i can perform better, things i am more comfortable. While on the other hand it takes time to know likes and dislikes in newly developed friendship. For instance, If I am on deciding mode of career, I was not sure which stream is better for me, in that case my old friend suggested me to go on engineering field because i have acumen and strong problem solving skills. I followed her advice and i am engineer now. I thank that friend to show me the right direction.

In conclusion, it's important to keep old friends in spite of making new friend. Old adage saying that "old is gold". To sum up old friends always gives me a right direction to my problems and I can share anything with him.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
..., trust between two people build over a period of time and therefore trust between two old fri...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lems easily with my old friends because i know he understand me and give me the r...
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Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
...y with my old friends because i know he understand me and give me the right solution to co...
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Suggestion: I
...the right solution to come out of that. i trust him and know that he never expose...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...the right solution to come out of that. i trust him and know that he never expose...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
... He can guide me in right direction. He understand in which situation i can perform better...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ction. He understand in which situation i can perform better, things i am more co...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... situation i can perform better, things i am more comfortable. While on the other...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lving skills. I followed her advice and i am engineer now. I thank that friend to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in spite of, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48843930636 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47972331095 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488439306358 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5193117942 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7368421053 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52631578947 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213553945602 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761864466981 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801108341116 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146925246718 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503210107298 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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