TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

The behavior of people and especially how they spend time doing different works either they are important or only enjoyment known as contentious topics that would be analyzed in psychological terms. In my opinion, although it is impossible to express whether all people do what they should do or only pursue enjoyment, it could be possible to provide some decisive evidence based on daily observations and researches.

First, people's attitude to life has always been a direct influence on their behavior. According to a broad range of researches conducted during the past centuries, personal characteristics of people have been made in the first eight years of their childhood, a period in which children are strongly influenced by parents and friends. Therefore, the behavior and attitude of children in life underlain by what they learn from other individuals.

Second, it can be observed that people who, in childhood, have parents with specific high goals in their life have a positive attitude to life, often pursue a goal like a scientific degree or some skills which make them capable to have a successful business. Statistics indicate that students who spend time doing specific works and study in top universities like MIT and Harvard have often grown in a suitable condition in their home and learned how to attempt to reach aims.

Third, other groups of people are those spend most of their time with friends and it seems they live only for enjoyment without any mission for their future. Based on my experience about people, if children in childhood do not learn some skills like time and money management, and also if they do not experience the pleasure of reaching a target they will not be a person with any mission in adulthood. Instead, they prefer to have short-lived pleasures and spend their time on these type of activities because this is the only thing they learn in childhood.

In conclusion, It is my deep conviction that the childhood experiences of people play a crucial role in making their personality traits and what activity they prefer to spend time.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, therefore, third, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03746397695 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72409150623 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536023054755 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2066752012 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.909090909 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5454545455 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275845484077 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113837558181 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774795108939 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155682772984 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930910865098 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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