TPO-06 - Integrated Writing Task Communal online encyclopedias represent one of the latest resources to be found on the Internet. They are in many respects like traditional printed encyclopedias collections of articles on various subjects. What is specifi

The professor gave additional information of the communal online encyclopedias. According to the reading passage, the communal encyclopedias have mainly three problems that make them less valuable than traditional printed one.

First of all, the original encyclopedias are written by professional researchers or experts so nonspecialists can not add idea or archive. However, the communal online one that anyone could reach and write therefore there are many mistakes made by random people. Even though, these are never going to found.

Second of all, about hacking. The traditional one is protected from hackers or vandals on the other hand the one online might be modified by any users. Moreover, if the format is changed by someone, the format can not fix easily.

The last is that the traditional encyclopedias have limited space to describe however the one online can have space as much as they need. The big advantage of the online encyclopedias is diversity. Contrary to the paper one, we can find the wide range of topics and views therefore we probably can have more variety of ideas and perspective made by all over the world.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 43.0788530466 19% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 52.1666666667 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 1977.66487455 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 186.0 407.700716846 46% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16129032258 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 4.48103885553 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85704003581 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 212.727598566 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 618.680645161 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2912972068 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2727272727 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229163885663 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819326704421 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596694425071 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134767500827 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295869694435 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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