This issue has arisen much controversy among children health organizations. Some of them are of the belief that advertisements which aimed at children are beneficial for them. However, others have debates on its advantages. I personally go along with the idea that it should be banned for the following reasons.
To put my first reason forward, I should mention it provides kids with harmful hobbies. In other words, in advertising which has been shown eye-catching colors, it attracts the attention of younger kids comprehensively. Therefore children will find it as a play to enjoy it. While watching advertising and concentrating on it, they will be unable to pay attention to their surroundings. If this condition has continued and repeated more, it will lead to missing the environmental stimulus that play a vital role in kids' mind development. The research findings confirm that the children who are more prone to advertising or watching TV from an early age, are more likely to suffer from attention disorders in the future.
Another reason we must not ignore is that since children be influenced by advertisements easily, they will put pressure on their parents to buy them things. Even parents will often be compelled to buy something that they know it is not useful for their children. Meanwhile, it may probable that parents will be manipulated by advertising and encouraged to buy things for their kids, in spite of knowing their children do not need it. Therefore, it may lead to increasing the financial problem of family.
To put it all in a nutshell, since nowadays we live in a consumer culture, we face lots of advertising. I believe at least the advertising which directed towards young children, should be restricted. It suffices to mention that it causes children's mind distinguish it as a play and leads to family financial problems.
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...and leads to family financial problems.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'at least', 'in other words', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213017751479 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.192307692308 0.158761421928 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0621301775148 0.0866891130778 72% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0414201183432 0.046263068375 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.100591715976 0.0685040099705 147% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.130177514793 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0473372781065 0.0351676179071 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00896107073 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0414201183432 0.0309702414327 134% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0621301775148 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0355029585799 0.0209618222197 169% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0147928994083 0.0139019557991 106% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1875.0 2387.08602151 79% => OK
No of words: 307.0 408.028673835 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.10749185668 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351791530945 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28990228013 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224755700326 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.14332247557 0.112833075102 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00896107073 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563517915309 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 59.9993512333 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0588235294 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0900408384 48.84282405 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.294117647 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 47.0490515424 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.16814159292 1.45489161554 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225322496192 0.300154397459 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105484518466 0.103427244359 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108293174673 0.0752933317313 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.496243546684 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143675329631 0.151897553556 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917960792297 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556162616761 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.287984897394 0.336927656856 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0628844613079 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153913099565 0.210909579961 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274720502208 0.0618886996521 44% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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