Some people stick to that the TV advertising shouldn't be allowed. They may consider that this action will affect the cognition abilities of young children. However, I think the healthy Television advertisements are beneficial in some situations and could be allowed.
To begin with, some people may think that young children cannot differ the visual advertising from the real world, thus, they cannot make a good decision. However, this is just the point I hope to argued. Firstly, the television advertisements cannot be memorized well by the children, so the advertising is mainly watched by their parents in fact. In this case, if the parents control the TV watching time of their children, the TV advertising couldn't hurt the children and make bad affect to their cognition. For example, for me, I couldn't remember the advertisements what I watched when I was 3 to 5 years old. Furthermore, as the children cannot distinguish the advertisements and the real world, expect this directed aimed advertisements, other advertisement could have the same effects to young children. In this case, only banning this type of advertisement is not fair.
Meanwhile, some TV advertisements directly towards young children are also useful just like other advertisements towards adults. The television advertisements could spread many information for the products. For instance, what the mainly function of the servant robots or the beneficial effects of one type of milk powder. These information could be utilized to make a more provident decision for the parents. Besides, I think the unhealthy advertisements couldn't permitted to put on by TV station, and the parents have the right to decide if to choose such products. Whatever, the advertisements are not designed to hurt the young children. And the evidence are lacked to determine the unhealthy effects for the young children.
In conclusion, the TV advertisements could be allowed even if they are mainly about the content directed towards young children. This type of TV advertisements actually don't own too much expected effects to the young children, because the latter even woundn't remember them. And the advertisements also have their function for the parents to make a better decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3025210084 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09340351477 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442577030812 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2307467884 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.65 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.85 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191125196228 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751138359263 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051983241589 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144308249278 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00738700738642 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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