TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It feels good if family members do strive for their children to show them the correct and wrong ways. As we know that in twenty first century there are varieties of way for advertising which help the companies to provide information about their products for people in the societies. Most famous way of advertising which different companies are using nowadays is advertising through televisions which has adverse effects on younger age children. I agree with statement which mention that, advertising through television should be prohibited for children to watch. I feel this for multiple reasons. First, children at growing age absorb negativity fast. Second, children in the aged of two-five may showing more attraction towards carrying UN-usual tasks in the future
stated roughly, children brains are more active at the growing ages. however, they should be conscious about what is good or bad. As an illustration, my mother were conscious about television advertising, and she never wanted us to watch advertising on televisions. Perhaps she always motivated us for watching cartoons. Because she knew that in younger age children absorption capacity is much higher, in this way, she believed that television advertising has negative feedback on us.
In addition, attraction towards carrying not necessary tasks will decrease the rates of being welfare in the future. In spit of the fact, the attraction which is touching the UN-usual tasks would be developed when children going to watch advertisements which are not necessary for them. For example, my nephew when he were 3 years old always used bad language among our family till the age of 6. His mother noticed him that he is watching advertise regarding, how children can improve bad behavior to make relatives happy. Once his mother shut the television down for a long period of time, he did not use bad language anymore.
To sum up, children should be away from television advertising for few reasons. First, they will absorb negative things. Second, they will develop their interest towards carrying not beneficial works in ahead.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-first
...rect and wrong ways. As we know that in twenty first century there are varieties of way for ...
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Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...g ways. As we know that in twenty first century there are varieties of way for advertis...
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Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ns are more active at the growing ages. however, they should be conscious about what is...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...her shut the television down for a long period of time, he did not use bad language anymore. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, for example, i feel, in addition, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22848664688 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70885590375 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572700296736 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7309147498 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7368421053 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7368421053 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215106696266 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709238701292 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575766356043 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133786980103 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041473684341 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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