TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We are currently living in the world of twenty-first century which is embedded with sophisticated technologies. It is extremely difficult to prevent young children from fixing their eyes on these various means of advertisement as television is not the only means of communication. Although, some group of people will completely dismiss television advertising to young children, I believe that it should be allowed but with certain controls.

To begin with, while this point may not sound plausible, television advertising is a means of inculcating certain desirable qualities in the lives of children at early stage. My own personal experience is a compelling example. I have a nephew who at a very young age started to watch some television advertisements and cartoon networks, he was so keen at everything he was watching from those channels. My first observation was that he requested to brush his teeth first thing in the morning without the parents chasing him or reminding him to do so. I was astonished with this great feature which he was building up at an early age and becoming independent.

Secondly, if young children are allowed to watch television advertising, it is also an avenue for home schooling at an early stage. Most of the television advertising directed towards kids shows up various cascades of colors which are very appealing and make them curious and willing to learn. More so, these television channels also advertises some interesting geographical studies of animals. Children often find this channels very interesting as they sing along with songs coming from the television and building their knowledge of various animals. For instance, a child who begins at a tender age to learn these fundamental science while probably have stronger interest in the future.

Even though, there are advantages of these advertising, it is still not without its disadvantages and as a result parents and guidance’s should pay closer attention to kids in order to control what they fix their eyes with and monitor the time duration.

In conclusion, it is certainly inevitable in this era of technology to deprive young kids from watching television advertisements as it has some advantages in the lives of these little ones.

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Average: 5.2 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23480662983 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05682799137 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541436464088 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6208529318 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167443623834 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609807466005 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411006962675 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950297416067 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451150778207 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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