TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There has been much discussion revolving around the topic of whether technology has made children less creative or not. In my opinion, technological revolution definitely has influenced on the human population, but this influence makes positive effect on the younger generation. Children have become more openminded, creative and communicative due to differnt technologies. I will explain my position providing the examples to support my point of view.

First of all, children are studying faster thanks to breakthrough investigations of technological tools used in the classroom. For example, my university classroom was equipped with interactive board used for studying anatomy of human body. On this board every student could cut different parts of human body by touching the screen of the board and see the structure of organs and tissues. I suppose this board is a good illustration how technologies could improve material’s absorbtion and understanding, and how students can get more clarification on a topic by using it.

Secondly, technologies are not always used be children for copying the ideas they saw in the internet. Sometimes by repeating something a child can primarily understand the material and after that express his own idea, based on the previous experience. Once, I red an article about a child who was into the computer science. During his surfing through a website he found two mistakes in the written code of the web page. Of course, he was the outstanding child, but his passion to the technologies and long time spended in the computer gave him an opportunity to make a creative desicion.

Finally, different technlogical tools or application direct to evolve children’s creativity and inspire them to make new investigations. I asserts that the games on the smartphone are the same nowadays as they were century ago. However, now we can see a big variaty of apps and games, and most of them are really challenging and caprivating even for adults. This games, in my opinion, make child to think out of frame.

To wrap up, as a future parent I don’t think that we should limit our children in technology’s usage. We just need to choose wisely applications and games what children can use. I hope that the examples given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion. There has been much discussion revolving around the topic of whether technology has made children less creative or not. In my opinion, technological revolution definitely has influenced on the human population, but this influence makes positive effect on the younger generation. Children have become more openminded, creative and communicative due to differnt technologies. I will explain my position providing the examples to support my point of view.

First of all, children are studying faster thanks to breakthrough investigations of technological tools used in the classroom. For example, my university classroom was equipped with interactive board used for studying anatomy of human body. On this board every student could cut different parts of human body by touching the screen of the board and see the structure of organs and tissues. I suppose this board is a good illustration how technologies could improve material’s absorbtion and understanding, and how students can get more clarification on a topic by using it.

Secondly, technologies are not always used be children for copying the ideas they saw in the internet. Sometimes by repeating something a child can primarily understand the material and after that express his own idea, based on the previous experience. Once, I red an article about a child who was into the computer science. During his surfing through a website he found two mistakes in the written code of the web page. Of course, he was the outstanding child, but his passion to the technologies and long time spended in the computer gave him an opportunity to make a creative desicion.

Finally, different technlogical tools or application direct to evolve children’s creativity and inspire them to make new investigations. I asserts that the games on the smartphone are the same nowadays as they were century ago. However, now we can see a big variaty of apps and games, and most of them are really challenging and caprivating even for adults. This games, in my opinion, make child to think out of frame.

To wrap up, as a future parent I don’t think that we should limit our children in technology’s usage. We just need to choose wisely applications and games what children can use. I hope that the examples given above have sufficiently expressed my opinion.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...idea, based on the previous experience. Once, I red an article about a child who was...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
...pire them to make new investigations. I asserts that the games on the smartphone are th...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...idea, based on the previous experience. Once, I red an article about a child who was...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'assert'
Suggestion: assert
...pire them to make new investigations. I asserts that the games on the smartphone are th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, i suppose, of course, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 52.1666666667 199% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3904.0 1977.66487455 197% => OK
No of words: 748.0 407.700716846 183% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2192513369 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22968341894 4.48103885553 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1573498589 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.300802139037 0.524837075471 57% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1234.8 618.680645161 200% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6003584229 194% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8116359857 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151302685491 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457984434623 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416974602286 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822954273518 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328917978417 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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