According to scientists, the name of the era is technology. Nowadays, all the people use technology in their lives and without a doubt, people's lives is easier with a technology. Some people believe the idea that technology make the children less creative than they were in the previously; others disagree. In my view, thanks to the technology, today children are more creative than past.
First, creativity comes from information, and today children can reach the information very easier than before with a technology devices. Thanks to technology, children can reach the any information quickly with a one smartphone. That makes them more creative. For instance, my little brother is nine years old. And he has a smartphone. Even though he is nine years old, he learned the computer programming from the tutorials in the internet. Moreover, he build a application for mobile phones without any help. Previously, nine years old child maybe just can play with a ball in the street. However, today, with smartphone technology, even children can build many thing. All in all, reachable information make the today's children more creative.
Second, there are many technology devices or application that helps to increase the children creativity. That tool make today's children more creative. For example, last year I went to the elementary school for pick up my friend's brother. In the elementary school contains lab that includes special devices for the children development. That place includes computers that have plenty of game like application. Children play these special games and that games increase the creativity without conscious. So, these applications are available thanks to the technology and these makes children even more creative.
To sum up, some people may oppose the idea that technology has a made children more creative. Not only, children can reach information easily than before and that makes them more creative but also technology devices provides some applications that increase children's creativity. Every parent should introduce the technology to their children for make them more creative.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'builds'.
Suggestion: builds
...tutorials in the internet. Moreover, he build a application for mobile phones without...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...als in the internet. Moreover, he build a application for mobile phones without a...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th a ball in the street. However, today, with smartphone technology, even childre...
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Line 3, column 662, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...one technology, even children can build many thing. All in all, reachable information mak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, moreover, second, so, for example, for instance, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40361445783 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79692638676 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469879518072 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9697322382 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.75 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8333333333 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162233556545 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521600020841 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534463905392 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120120673172 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049558843963 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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