TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The reading and the lecture are both about hydrogen-based-fuel-cell, which uses hydrogen to operate cars. While the article mentions the advantages of fuel-cell engines over current engines, the lecturer casts doubt on all those advantages by saying that the passage failed in the assessment of fuel-cell engines.

First of all, the article states that internal-combustion engine depends on petroleum, which is nonrenewable source of energy; in contrast, the fuel-cell engine cannot be easily depleted because it comes from oil or even water. The professor, on the other hand, explains that hydrogen fuel in not easily to be produced. She argues that the process is highly artificial to obtain pure liquid, then very cold temperature more than minus two hundred are applied to get it, thus, it is not such practical way.

Second, the author claims that the hydrogen- based fuel cell does not produce carbon dioxide as a byproduct, therefore, does not hurt environment. The professor, conversely, discusses that hydrogen-based fuel cell does not solve pollution problem. She elaborates on this by mentioning that a lot of pollution is created by purification process to produce hydrogen fuel, where it depends on burning oil or coal to obtain energy, and if the cars did not pollute, the factories would pollute the environment.

Third, and last disadvantages that mentioned by the author is that fuel-cell engine will be more economic than current engine because it will be twice as efficient as current engine in using the fuel. Conversely, the speaker illustrates that there will not be any money saving. She puts forth the idea that hydrogen-cell engine does not undergo any chemical reaction without platinum, which is very expensive material. Moreover, the process of replacing platinum with any cheaper material was completely unsuccessful.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... temperature more than minus two hundred to get it, thus, it is not such practica...
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Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
Suggestion: depends
...t creates a lot of pollution because it depend on burning oil or coal to obtain energy...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, while, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31958762887 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08552412644 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580756013746 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.925877732 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0251032998354 0.236089414692 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0105768846044 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0153289268875 0.0737576698707 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0167256260334 0.150856017488 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114194802813 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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