TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, technology has a most important effect in our life especially in children's life. There is no doubt that the majority of people believe that technology completely useful and children can use for improving practical skills such as innovation ,many other think technology has some negative effect such as less attractive. I entirely agree with latter group by expending following reasons.

For one think, one of the most important negative effect of technology in children's behavior is less activity .Nowadays we live in an advance era by innovating lots of new gadgets, machines, cell phones and so on every day. Children always like to use new technology and they are enjoy spending more and more time for fun. For instant, most of children spend many time for some game such as soccer online instead of doing homework and concentration on their lessons. UN fortunately, they are very keen to continue this online game as an addicted people. Additionally, children need to spend more time and focused on their lessons and pay attention to their course and do more exercise by going to the gym ,running or by going painting class and so on. In order to prevent less activity and more creative and make a good decision for their future.

On the other hand, in the past children was more attractive, more effort than todays' children because technology was not very advance and our children spent most of the time for studying, researching and so on. For example, children in the past were enthusiastically to go elementary school and always they asked lots of questions of their parents like "how can I study better or how can I solve my problem". Moreover, it was a force for every children to go school and to be hard working or by more study and by more creative .And if we think about past children we all know they got up early in the morning every day after that they were ready to go school, learning new knowledge, doing more practice and improving practical skill.

Last but not least, as above mentioned reasons, definitely technology has a negative effect on nowadays children and it causes changing some skill such as culture, behavior, creative attractive and so on. Government should create a policy to prevent this issue and help children to be more attractive.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 4, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...y in childrens behavior is less activity .Nowadays we live in an advance era by in...
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Line 4, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nowadays
...in childrens behavior is less activity .Nowadays we live in an advance era by innovating...
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Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...like to use new technology and they are enjoy spending more and more time for fun. Fo...
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Line 4, column 337, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...ore and more time for fun. For instant, most of children spend many time for some game such as s...
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Line 4, column 360, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...un. For instant, most of children spend many time for some game such as soccer online ins...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...and do more exercise by going to the gym ,running or by going painting class and s...
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Suggestion: .
...ng or by more study and by more creative .And if we think about past children we a...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
... or by more study and by more creative .And if we think about past children we all ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23023255814 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.139534883721 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118604651163 0.0866891130778 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0767441860465 0.046263068375 166% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0488372093023 0.0685040099705 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13488372093 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0395348837209 0.0351676179071 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69643151819 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0279069767442 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0581395348837 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0093023255814 0.0209618222197 44% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0046511627907 0.0139019557991 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2305.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 390.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91025641026 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330769230769 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261538461538 0.251872472559 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.223076923077 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115384615385 0.112833075102 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69643151819 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 55.4387577921 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 27.8571428571 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7577737169 48.84282405 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.642857143 120.699889404 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.642857142857 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 54.010989011 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.52631578947 1.45489161554 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286941575475 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107250449967 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.063833955451 0.0752933317313 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.546189817152 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156129938761 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12024406963 0.114077575197 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463642721248 0.0781384742642 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.340080475584 0.336927656856 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.123501698738 0.067059652881 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192903744773 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438094522073 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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