TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As we are conscious about the progression of technology day by day this acceleration brought enormous changes in people life. In spite of facts, the rapid technological progression in human's life made the children more creative as those they were live in the past. I agree with the statements, which talks about the technology develop the interest of children to be extraordinary creators. I feel this for several reasons. First, technology leaved positive impressions on children knowledge. Moreover, technology provide outline for the children to do not disturb the family members.
stated roughly, children undoubtedly wants to bring positive changes in their knowledge level. This is possible when they focus on what changes are coming new in the technology soon. However, this possibility will encourage them to be creative in the future. For instances, if i accounting a group of children which they are students in 9th class, and they are measured about five members. They made a robot by using new technology with the help of their school teachers, i can state, the robot was really amazing. by looking to this point, nowadays technology really helped the children to be marvelous creators.
Moreover, releasing new technological changes such as, changes in cellphone, computers, toys would make the situation for children more calm and better. As an illustration, my cousin who is only about 5 years old, made his family members really exhausted by doing harsh things, he wanted his family to buy a new cellphone for playing games for him. After few days, his mother bought a cellphone from him, today he is calm and relax. in spite of facts, it indicates that technology made the environment cool for children.
To collect the points, advanced technology made the life for children enjoyable. Because of two reasons. Furthermore, children are more creative by accustoming technological tools. Second, made the environment for children out of noisiness.

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Average: 7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y made the life for children enjoyable. Because of two reasons. Furthermore, children a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, for instance, i feel, such as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24126984127 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88424535229 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546031746032 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5765081835 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.55 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201584376496 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704478441634 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508695898835 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137779735117 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450363798153 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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