TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Without a question, some people would prefer to do exactly what they already do well while others may consider the opposite point of views, and take some risks trying new things. As far as I am concern, I prefer to do what I already do well. At my adult age, I experienced different things along my life, and I took my own risks that helped me to decided what I like most to do and what is the best for me.

First of all, young people usually embrace the experience of new things as they are usually in search of their own identity and different options for their future. Taking risk, in this early time of our life is part of our learning and the healthy action to take. On the contrary, being an adult, as I am, things turn to be more clear and pragmatic. For instant, in adult time, the responsibility of taking care of a family makes us to slow down and provide a secure income. Consequently, as I am an adult with resposabilities, I would rather to do what I already do well when professional activity refer.

Secondly, beside what age you are, be an expert or enjoying what you do well would reduce the level of stress that can affect a person. For example, all of us can remember our first day in a job, how stressful could be because we need to learn many things in a short time. In fact, stress is a very unhealthy thing to experience in a high level and for a long period of time. Thus, I like to take care of my health by keeping those stressful moments, that a new activity could provoke, as less as possible.

Finally, it is important to remark that doing something that you already do well could means some expertise very well paid. By this token, experience and professionalims can result in the benefit of a higher income salary and better level of life. For instance, as a video editor for so many years my name is already positioned in the market as synonim of good work, so I can charge higher rates for my hours working.

In summary, based on the arguments explained above I consider that for an adult person, as I am, I prefer to do things that I already do well.

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Average: 6.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...perience in a high level and for a long period of time. Thus, I like to take care of my health...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...t a new activity could provoke, as less as possible. Finally, it is important t...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...omething that you already do well could means some expertise very well paid. By this ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in fact, in summary, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3358778626 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50280291436 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498727735369 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4024438779 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8125 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0872256531248 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035990819344 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264805601054 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545103614983 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017742677753 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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