Majority of people waste time by playing computer these days. I agree that playing computer games is a waste of time. Computer games are harmful for health. In addition, children can’t focus on their studies. I will explain my reasons on the next paragraphs.
To begin with, games online are harmful for health. For example, when I play the computer games, my eyes get tired . According to many people, computer games reduced vision. Some people died when they play computer game. So computer games is very dangerous and harmful for our health and it is a waste of time and money too.
Secondly, children can’t focus on their studies. For instance, students get addicted to computer games.Furthermore,they think of games when they study. That’s why children don’t concentrate on their studies. Children have to study but cannot, because of computer games.They waste their time for these games
In conclusion, playing computer games is waste of time and should not allow for the children. To solve this problem, people have to find other enjoyment without computer games. Do you agree ?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 938.0 1977.66487455 47% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 179.0 407.700716846 44% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24022346369 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 4.48103885553 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78453038674 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 212.727598566 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 618.680645161 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.023230261 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.625 100.406767564 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.1875 20.6045352989 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278204158125 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117762864578 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100511665652 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21523219434 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792502580502 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.93 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 86.8835125448 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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