TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Today computer games are very special to children in general, some of these computer games are beneficial such as brain storming games, some other games could be harmful if the child spend most of his day playing these games. I agree with the opinion that computer games could be a big waste of time and that children should not be allowed to play them more than an hour a day as they should spend their time in more useful activities such as the following.

First, Reading, Back in the days before introducing computer games, children used to read a lot which opens their minds to the world and help developing their knowledge. Even reading super power stories which many children like is good for their imagination skills. Unfortunately today children prefer to play computer games rather than reading which in my opinion is a waste of time.

Second, Today children prefer to stay at home to play computer games rather than going for out-doors sports, which affects their bodies and social life negatively. No doubts sports are very important for a healthy body and to get introduced to other children in order to make friends.

Third, children should have time to explore themselves, they need to know what are their hobbies and take good care of these hobbies. If the child spend most of his time playing computer games he will never get a chance to try different hobbies like art or music. Hobbies are very important for anybody on the long run, they help developing our personalities, they are our stress relief most of the time and they add value to the person's life.

In conclusion, Computer games are enjoyable and can be beneficial to the child's brain but too much of anything can be harmful. Parents should be cautious and set a limit of time for computer games so the child can Read, go for sports or practice some hobbies.

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Average: 6.8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...opens their minds to the world and help developing their knowledge. Even reading super pow...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
...s and social life negatively. No doubts sports are very important for a healthy body a...
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Line 7, column 332, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
... for anybody on the long run, they help developing our personalities, they are our stress ...
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Line 7, column 432, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...t of the time and they add value to the persons life. In conclusion, Computer game...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'in conclusion', 'in general', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28818443804 0.229887763892 125% => OK
Verbs: 0.155619596542 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0893371757925 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0345821325648 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0576368876081 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.109510086455 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.028818443804 0.0351676179071 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36757607221 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0432276657061 0.0309702414327 140% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0720461095101 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.028818443804 0.0209618222197 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.014409221902 0.0139019557991 104% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1852.0 2387.08602151 78% => OK
No of words: 322.0 408.028673835 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75155279503 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.291925465839 0.338922669872 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214285714286 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145962732919 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0621118012422 0.112833075102 55% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36757607221 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 50.9400462374 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6684587814 58% => OK
Sentence length: 26.8333333333 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0402918551 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.333333333 120.699889404 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.5533526081 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 0.644075263715 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 48.2619047619 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.72093023256 1.45489161554 118% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370185087875 0.300154397459 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.17105597051 0.103427244359 165% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0717470982016 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.681485619293 0.497263757937 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0903037382601 0.151897553556 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168129991292 0.114077575197 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655258881734 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.279132822985 0.336927656856 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0402504649891 0.067059652881 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230015609989 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481391924351 0.0618886996521 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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if the child spend most of his day
if the child spends most of his day

children should have time to explore themselves, they need to know what are their hobbies and take good care of these hobbies.
children should have time to explore themselves. They need to know what are their hobbies and take good care of these hobbies. //these are two sentences

If the child spend most of his time playing
If the child spends most of his time playing

Hobbies are very important for anybody on the long run, they help developing our personalities, they are our stress relief most of the time and they add value to the person's life.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? there are three sentences. Punctuation marks are not put properly

flaws:
No. of Different Words: 159 200

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1487 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.291 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.967 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.697 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5