TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

There is no shortage of debate about effects of Internet on people. Personally, I believe that as long as web search is used properly, it can be invaluable assistant in every sphere of our life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in terms of academic content, there are abundant lectures and articles to carry out researches. Students do not waste their time to look for data, because the cloud makes it easy. Their tasks are only discriminate sources and sift information to marshal facts. My own experience is compelling example of this. On one occasion, my professor gave me assignment on nuclear physics for final exam, which is the most complex part of this subject. I found a lot of books related to the topic, but information in these books were limited. Added to this deadline were no much to read them find useful facts. Therefore, I started using web search, especially, I looked for lectures and articles , which were no long but enough to me. Before two days from deadline,I absorbed so much information on nuclear physics in little time with the help of the Internet, in other words, I finished my task and was ready to examination. In the day of exam, I was very confident, because I had already learned almost all concepts of this topic.
Secondly, we can use the cloud storage for get informed from news. Although there are competitors of the Internet in this field, such as TV, radio, newspaper, it is the fastest and cheapest way of stay current. Furthermore, there may be misleading facts, but the renowned companies for news are reliable. Because they struggle for consumers as well as fame. Therefore, we can get true information from the Online searching. For example, three month ago, a false fact about decease of governor of California, Arnold Schwarzenegger, was released in every media ranging from radio to newspaper. In additon, some web sites published this information, but famous site, Guardian proved that was not reliable and true data. According to the evidence of Guardian, Arnold was ill, but not serios. After that many people changed their beliefs about news publishers, and they begun rely on primarily the online cloud.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the Internet is great and useful tool in our life. This is because there are many sources to conduct researches, and because we can use it for stay current.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83855421687 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66559117165 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561445783133 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.247537345 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116611454747 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311014942003 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.028048490016 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0651213542673 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283240946691 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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