Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles) is less important now than in the past.
In recent times, extended family has limited impacts in people’s life. Many people believe that the influence of extended family in their life is no more valuable than before. I agree with this idea that life of today does not require much benefit from the extended family like in the past. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the extended family is less significant in our life now because of our busy lifestyle. Certainly in the past, families have enough time to carry out activities together. Also, some family has a culture of living together even if you get marry which brings love and unity among them. However, the case is different today. Many families because of different activities being engaged in like employment opportunity make them to leave their extended family and move on to start a new life. Moreover, the policy of living together to have an immense family has gone into extinction, thereby making the grandparents and other extended family irrelevant again. The working lifestyle of today is so demanding for people to remember others. In my personal experience as an example, since I married, I don’t have the opportunity of visiting my village. Not that I don't want to, it is because of limited time. Therefore, the busier we are in our daily life the more we distance ourselves from our extended family making them less important to us.
Secondly, advance in technology has brought a tremendous opportunity to people to make them forget other relatives. Indeed, life in the past gives room for sharing ideas and meeting people. Nevertheless, the development in technology has made people to move far away from relatives and reduces the importance of getting closer to their extended family. For example, my brother travels to the biggest city in my country for the past five years. He always calls on phone to reach his extended family because he is less opportune to visit them. Therefore, the improvement in technology brought a wide gap between us and our extended family.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that extended family is less privilege in our life than ever because of our busy activity and development in technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nity of visiting my village. Not that I dont want to, it is because of limited time....
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Suggestion:
...activity and development in technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97593582888 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65283359722 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524064171123 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8950483463 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.619047619 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236671414344 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689256262214 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055200062487 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150749401367 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396229966623 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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