According to scientists the name of the this era is communication. Nowadays, people can communicate other people and find friend more easily. Some people believe the idea that the extended family members are still important; others disagree. In my view, extended family is not important today. Moreover, members of extended family were more important in the past. The reasons are as follows.
First, nowadays, thanks to the technology people can find easily friends and that makes extended family members unimportant. Today, there are plenty of smart phone apps that helps people to find friends. In previously finding friends was a not easy that force to talk their extended family and that makes extended family crucial. For example, even though we are in the same family, me and my cousin are completely different likes such as I enjoy basketball however, he likes soccer. But thanks to smart phone application I can find another person who has basketball. So I do not have to hang out with my cousin. All in all, same family does not mean everything. Thanks to some application today people can meet other people who likes same tastes. That makes extended family unimportant.
Second, previously people live with their extended family members in the same house, today it is nearly impossible. Previously, houses were huge and people share the same house with their extended family that makes extended family important. However, today houses are very small and obviously people do no share same houses with their extended family members. For instance, my grandfather stated previously they lived with their aunts, cousins together. Besides, he see their cousins as their brothers or sisters. On the other hand, today I do not know even my cousins name. They probably live in Canada. We are not even share the same city. So, people previously share the same house but today it is very rare. That situation show today extended family less important than before.
To sum up, some people may oppose the idea that extended family less important than before. Not only, technology make the extended family less important but also people are not share same house with their extended family. In general, people should not see the people as family member or not, people see the other people as good people and bad people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
According to scientists the name of the this era is communication. Nowadays, people ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... force to talk their extended family and that makes extended family crucial. For ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and my cousin are completely different likes such as I enjoy basketball however...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
...ir aunts, cousins together. Besides, he see their cousins as their brothers or sist...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
...t today it is very rare. That situation show today extended family less important th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, for example, for instance, in general, such as, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05208333333 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4043327499 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2628644096 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.2857142857 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7142857143 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150259035918 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595484103493 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585401992677 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112481374165 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165694764301 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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