TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In this busy schedule of lives, we all have family, whom is precious to every one and they are the people, whom you are sharing all your ups and downs, your highs and lows and they stand and buck up in each field of life. Family basically consists of mainly ancestors, including: grand parents, uncles, aunts as well as your little cousin siblings. According to me, these people, calling extended family, are really mean to myself. May be many of the humans does not require them, but I do. There are many reasons for their importance: they stand behind you in every difficulty, you can do celebrations with them and they keep telling you about your religious culture.

First of all, in every human life, he would probably some of the uncontrollable situation, in which he will definitely wants some body to help and assist during bad days. So, I think, grand parents are the gift of god, who embrace you in every perspective of time. Also, they love you more than your parents do.

Secondly, obviously in this life, we have so busy routine that there is less or no possibility to find people, whom can share personal events with them, thus, we just calling up our extended family members to make those days extremely beautiful to you, little cousin brothers and sisters always feel you as a ideal for them. On the other hand, uncles and aunts make these kind of gatherings so overwhelm.

Next, your current or nuclear family, actually get always in works of what they think is important to them, including mother and father too. Later, in this race of life, we forget to follow our believes and rule and from where we belonging and especially our worships. Hence, I prefer my grand father and mother, also, my uncle and aunts, who teach me every beliefs, which as a Muslim I should follow it and must have all the knowledge regarding our culture.

In conclusion, I completely show my disagreement to the above statement, as these people are the real and fantastic world towards you and make life super cool that you cannot resist by loving them and caring for their lives.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...as well as your little cousin siblings. According to me, these people, calling extended family,...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... family, are really mean to myself. May be many of the humans does not require the...
^^
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... in every human life, he would probably some of the uncontrollable situation, in which he w...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
... situation, in which he will definitely wants some body to help and assist during bad...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'somebody'?
Suggestion: somebody
...tion, in which he will definitely wants some body to help and assist during bad days. So,...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...brothers and sisters always feel you as a ideal for them. On the other hand, uncl...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...n the other hand, uncles and aunts make these kind of gatherings so overwhelm. Next, yo...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...s race of life, we forget to follow our believes and rule and from where we belonging an...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68392370572 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35912233759 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58310626703 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0191646447 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.785714286 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2142857143 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3571428571 5.45110844103 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148058089745 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528315789896 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383890677064 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784816677809 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233694289515 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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