TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

Whatever we are learning in early stage of life that only comes with us entire life, and moreover learning process occurs more than 70% at the age before seven years, remaining whatever we are learning remaining our rest life only about 30% not more than that. That learning could be education, skill, sports activities, culture and saving money for the safer life. Let me explain this statements which state that children learn the habit of saving money from the childhood onward with my own experience.

Firstly, myself and my younger are in our family, from childhood onward I have the habit saving money whereas my brother, he is very lavish like whatever he likes he wants get the stuff at moment itself, no matter how much that cost to buy. Because of lavish activity and lack saving habit even though now he is age 30 years old. Still behave like that same manner even today, it causes him more trouble in his life. But I am little bit more conservative about spending and more concern about saving money from my childhood onward. Infact that attitude helping me lot today. Financially, I am well secure now. I use to all mental calculation regarding my budget.

Secondly, apart from saving money, this habit helps the kids in not deviating from the social norms. After all, social norms expected behaviour from every individual we can not denial it am i right? When they have more money in their hand the they try to unwanted activities like going to bar, drugs and seeing porn star pictures which is not correct for our culture and norms. And eventually, kids become member of counter part culture which will spoil the entire community.

Thirdly, if the Children are lavish then won't concentrate on the study, they will try to dates with girl friends which in turns not spoil his image but it spoils his/ her family name too. So in order to keep the kids in moral track they supposed to learn the activity of saving money which help them future as a good citizen in his country.

Finally, if have these saving money from earlier life that could help his carriers like financial manager in a good company because of his early childhood learning isn't?. Even his later life will be bright, he need not financial struggle. For example, if he wants to make their kids want medical professional he can do it without any doubt.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to remain'.
Suggestion: to remain
...ars, remaining whatever we are learning remaining our rest life only about 30% not more t...
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Suggestion: these
...oney for the safer life. Let me explain this statements which state that children le...
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... him more trouble in his life. But I am little bit more conservative about spending and mo...
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Suggestion:
...g money from my childhood onward. Infact that attitude helping me lot today. Fina...
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...m every individual we can not denial it am i right? When they have more money in t...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...very individual we can not denial it am i right? When they have more money in the...
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Suggestion: the; they
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...y have more money in their hand the they try to unwanted activities like going to...
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...lly, kids become member of counter part culture which will spoil the entire comm...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'date'.
Suggestion: date
...centrate on the study, they will try to dates with girl friends which in turns not sp...
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...the kids in moral track they supposed to learn the activity of saving money which...
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Line 10, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...because of his early childhood learning isnt?. Even his later life will be bright, h...
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Line 10, column 342, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ssional he can do it without any doubt.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'whereas', 'after all', 'apart from', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240618101545 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.150110375276 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.075055187638 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0772626931567 0.046263068375 167% => OK
Pronouns: 0.101545253863 0.0685040099705 148% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119205298013 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0419426048565 0.0351676179071 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.2361797116 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0176600441501 0.0309702414327 57% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0596026490066 0.0887237588012 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176600441501 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0198675496689 0.0139019557991 143% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2359.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 410.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75365853659 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309756097561 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.190243902439 0.251872472559 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126829268293 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0634146341463 0.112833075102 56% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2361797116 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551219512195 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 63.7277147279 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5789473684 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8634091276 48.84282405 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.157894737 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5789473684 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.54480286738 252% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.6033376123 45.7405998639 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.22147651007 1.45489161554 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201175775456 0.300154397459 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113773788009 0.103427244359 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0793529791293 0.0752933317313 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479566681259 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.174988424806 0.151897553556 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068714705255 0.114077575197 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556322876032 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.244096913785 0.336927656856 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0456297065844 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125279041623 0.210909579961 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440292438702 0.0618886996521 71% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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