TPO 15 – task 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In Order to become financially responsible adults, the children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

It is a fact that every person has to learn financial responsibilities in life. Children's age is the perfect age where they can easily learn all the financial responsibilities and related facts. Some argue that it is beneficial for children to become financially independent. While others hold the different idea that children have a lot many other responsibilities at this age, and so, it is not suitable for them to add more stress at this age. From my perspective, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, taking financial responsibility is beneficial in countless ways for children at an early age. This experience, in my point of view, would be very useful for them in the future and assist them to prosper their future as they enter into adulthood. Although reading many articles and taking a class of account and management, only through active participation in the work, and society would help the children to learn about financial importance. I am a compelling example of this. I started working in an accounting firm because of my parents insisted me to start work before going to university. I worked there for a year in that company. Afterward, when I started going to university, I have realized the value of the money. On top of that, I stopped taking money from my parents, and I have become financially independent which could not be possible without my job. Hence, I have never able to gain financial independence if I would not have started working at a young age.
Furthermore, children would be aware of rules and regulations about the business at an early age. They can able to distinguish between bad from good easily which would be beneficial for them when they will actually start their professional work. To illustrate this more, My brother acquired a summer job at my uncle's wood workshop. They have made a deal together that he supposed to pay my brother $300 per week, however, my uncle did not pay him single penny intentionally to teach him a lesson. My brother learned a lesson from the experience that it is always necessary to proceed for the written agreement before making a partnership with anyone. Consequently, he has learned other useful information regarding the business by working at my uncle's workshop.
Finally, it is crystal clear that the children who govern their own money would also learn to survive in unfavorable economic situation. Nowadays, due to some natural disasters like earthquake and flooding, people have to face a financial crisis. In such a situation, it becomes really important that people would manage their money wisely. Therefore, if teenagers will start working somewhere at a young age, they will be definitely gain the ability to govern their own money in the financial crisis.
All in all, I strongly believe that teaching children how to control their money is essential for their future. This is because it helps them to understand the value for money and it makes them financially independent.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 605, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... start work before going to university. I worked there for a year in that company...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, really, regarding, so, therefore, while, as to, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2530.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97053045187 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8915472307 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49115913556 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5998849952 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7037037037 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8518518519 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96296296296 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236651348869 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073448650773 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581885956929 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154362170897 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618640154631 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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