TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are too many people around the world travelling for pleasure. There are some ways to travel where they want. They can travel in a group or alone. some people prefer to travel alone not in a group leading by a tour guide. In my opinion that would be better to travel in a tour guide for three main reasons.

The first reason is that when people travel in a group they are not worry about how to find a correct path for moving from one place to a new specific place to which they wanting to go. The group has a leader who is able to guide the group correctly. And it is worth to mention that the leader has a lot of experiences about the new place. And he knows how to choose a best and short path for arriving to destination safely and quickly without wasting a lot of time and energy.

The second reason is that there a lot of unpredictable events which may happen and may cause problems to someone who is in a group, and he can be helped by other members of the group and also as I mentioned in the first reason the leader could tell how to solve the problem or how to deal with that unexpected problem which may cause some difficulties for that person during the journey.

The third reason is that being in group could make the individuals in the group happier than travelling alone. The people in a group can talk to each other for not feeling that the journey is boring. And if the path is long and they could make each other laugh during the long path. And everybody in the group has a chance to find new friends.

To sum up, being in a group for travelling is better, and individuals are not worry to find the correct path because the leader guides them. And they can deal with unexpected bad events because they can be supported by other members. And also the journey would be happier because they have a chance to find the new friends.

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Average: 6.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...t. They can travel in a group or alone. some people prefer to travel alone not in a ...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...e new place. And he knows how to choose a best and short path for arriving to des...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he group happier than travelling alone. The people in a group can talk to each othe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, third, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.27478753541 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17662940675 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.399433427762 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.3694559525 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7647058824 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141910058269 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581777762166 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421507237191 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876155954021 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357088265775 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.24 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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In my opinion that would be better to travel in a tour guide for three main reasons.
In my opinion it would be better to travel in a tour guide for three main reasons.

they wanting to go
they are wanting to go

how to choose a best and short path for arriving ...
how to choose the best and shortest path for arriving ...

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flaws:
No. of Different Words: 139 200

We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

need to improve vocabulary words.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1473 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.173 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.128 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 45 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.818 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5