TPO 20 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the shadow of the doubt all the people must follow their demands and dreams and try and work hard to achieve their goals. some people believe that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. According to my own experience and actual observation of life have led me to be agree with this people’s opinion. I delve into some reasons to substantial my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is this, all the people must follow their demand and don’t think about their result. they must try hard to and take risk to be successful. Every career in the world don’t have guaranty to be successful and if you want to be successful you must try hard and create the new idea. For example, nowadays among the company employee who be successful that make new idea and take risk and offer new idea to their dean, and if their idea fail they don’t give up and continue with a lot of experience from his previous failure.
Another point that springing to mind is that, all the famous and respectable people like Alexander Grahamble, Edison, others, all of them in their life take risk and invent the valuable thing like electronic and phone and help to the people lives. they are take risk in their life and do some thing above which already know. they more time fail in their idea but didn’t give up. if they are didn’t take risk in their life perhaps we don’t have this develop in different fields and if we don’t take risk and don’t do the creative jobs and idea may be we don’t have any develop in the future.
To sum it all up by taking all the details into consideration, all the people must follow their demands and dreams and don’t thin g about the result. successful people always take risk and try new thing rather than do some things that already know do I hope that all the peoples in their live be successful in their ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...ust follow their demands and dreams and try and work hard to achieve their goals. some ...
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Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...y and work hard to achieve their goals. some people believe that successful people t...
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Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...nd don't think about their result. they must try hard to and take risk to be su...
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Line 4, column 245, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'guarantied'.
Suggestion: guarantied
...ery career in the world don't have guaranty to be successful and if you want to be ...
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Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...and phone and help to the people lives. they are take risk in their life and do some...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...they are take risk in their life and do some thing above which already know. they more tim...
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Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...do some thing above which already know. they more time fail in their idea but didn&a...
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Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...on't do the creative jobs and idea may be we don't have any develop in the f...
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Line 10, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Successful
...and don't thin g about the result. successful people always take risk and try new thi...
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Line 10, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... take risk and try new thing rather than do some things that already know do I ho...
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Line 10, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y know do I hope that all the peoples in their live be successful in their ways. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66096866097 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41349051912 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.6796492571 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.857142857 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303821550849 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142468358251 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151523268955 0.0737576698707 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236513406043 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969123089416 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.