TPO 20 independent
agree or not
successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Success is a convoluted word which has many different meanings behind it, and there are myriad ways reaching the destination of success, so people cannot compromise on one specific way. There are mutually exclusive explanations whether experiencing new professions or focusing on one particular job is the main turnpike of being successful. In my view, I am inclined with the former idealization in spite of the fact that the latter has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated completely by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost rationalization which is worth mentioning is that by entering new fields, one can experience diverse majors; therefore, they can realize which job they are more prone to. As the "Black Swan" hypothesis endorses, in today's complicated world, people must indulge themselves to new opportunities in order to increase their experience and find their way to a better living situation. To put it into a more vivid picture, I myself had been a civil engineer for many years, but I did not like my profession at all and was always complaining about my life's situation. After reading about diverse majors, I realized that I love the world of investigation. In that time, I knew that I want to be a stock market trader, so I quit my job as fast as I could even though I did not know the destination of my choice. However, I accepted the risk and started my whole new journey. Nowadays, not only I am satisfied with my new field but also I make a hefty amount of money each and every year.
The second and equally far-reaching justification to bear in mind is that risking new fields gives individuals the opportunity to visit new people who can help them in their majors. Elderly people always say that never reject new relationships and be always eager to meet others. As an illustration, my cousin was unsuccessful in his career insomuch as he thought that he did not others' help. Nonetheless, after experiencing failures in other professions, he acknowledged that his core problem is his lack of social life spanning. He took the risk and for one year attended as many as conferences as he could so as to find new professionals and strengthen his relations. Now, he is considered as one of the best entrepreneurs in the country owing to the fact that he usually work collaboratively and outsources his workload to his colleagues.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned facts into account, I concur with this idealization that for increasing the chances of being more successful, people ought to be fearless and try new things. In that case, they will increase their experience in numerous fields which can be helpful for them choosing their most wanted dream job. Additionally, this will give them the opportunity to visit new seasoned professionals who can contribute and collaborate with them to reach their objectives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
Success is a convoluted word which has many different meanings behind it, and there are myria...
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Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nded as many as conferences as he could so as to find new professionals and strengthen h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, then, therefore, as to, in conclusion, in my view, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97011952191 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07461908008 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535856573705 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6810723141 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.75 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109987659443 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348934380989 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032294924448 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0666881401898 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116712137513 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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