TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are certain considerations and factors that everyone can take into account to examine or investigate people’s opinion. I defiantly believe that successful individuals try new things and take risks. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represent my conspicuous reasons to elaborate my preference.
To begin with, trying new things can lead people to extend their knowledge and learn more. Consequently, it will help them to be successful in their careers. In fact, having knowledge about different fields with details makes it easier to gain goals. in fact, when we read about successful people around the world we will notice that most of them were knowledgeable in a many majors such as math, physics or psychology. For instance, Galilee who is well-known scientist in the world, tried many majors and ultimately found lots of understanding about earth, sun and circulations. So this factor contributed him to be prosperous.
Furthermore, taking risks can bring many opportunities which cannot be achievable by only knowing how to do well. Nowadays, the world alters very swiftly and all youngsters experience a huge progress and improvement in several fields of science and engineering including transportation, communication, health caring and even artificial intelligence. So, if someone wants to be prosperous in one of majors which I mentioned he/she should experience or try them at university or getting some courses in special and professional classes. For example, if a civil engineering student seeking progress in his/her major he/she should experience a variety of classes and workshops related to structure, concrete and architecture.
Finally, world history shows that most of successful people took risks during their lives to achieve their goals quickly. As a matter of fact being successful needs a long time. But those people who attain their aims sooner than others they will be more successful than late ones. Generally speaking, time factor make a significant role in our lives. Hence, not only taking risks can lead to save time, but also it can help pupils to be successful in future. For example, Mio is one of successful people in architecture field. He has many accomplishments in designing building. He has pointed out in his biography that taking risks helps him to save time and build over hundred structures.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folks should bear in mind that taking risks and trying novel choices is one of successful people features. Participations of learning more, having many opportunities and being fast are prime and conspicuous supports.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
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Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37378640777 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08237519707 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594660194175 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3835653833 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2608695652 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.39130434783 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185302225958 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523472993716 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554392858777 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987115855084 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183458629197 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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