TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

We live in this age, where people put lots of question towards the either abilities as well as capabilities and point out the fingers to the personality of a person. yes! I immensely accept that for a super succeeding level, person standards of hard work pays off. It is sometimes saying that, life is a race and child ought to be able to run fast in centers, like: schools and tuition, but, the matter of the fact is to emphasize, how to become a man/woman to face and absorb the hard realities of life and stay like a mountain in those circumstances and in the end, then you will be able to achieve the promotions of life. There are many reasons to holding this statement.

To begin with my first reason, good student of a school creates his/ her self as a bright one, but only in those specific time period, when you are a little child, answering the teacher in a small square class, in front of other tiny students. It does not communicate with his/ her future job especially the education. May be he will choose a dancing profession, after that, he does not acquire good mathematics steps for solving to his dance steps.

Secondly, however, sharp student get benefits during their study period, but I have seen many adults, whose were very creative in their school lives, but, now they are just going for a 12 hours job, keeping their regular boring routine, with no extra efforts. For instance, one of my colleague is my schoolmate too, he was the tiger of the subjects, but now, he is just a ordinary man, who works under a boss, without showing any great effort.

Taking everything into consideration, I support the abilities and advance image of the person, because they are creating themselves honestly, according the the rough and tough situations of life. Also, inspire the youngsters to develop a inner soul in the later days, while, your performances are not working in the schools sectors.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yes
...fingers to the personality of a person. yes! I immensely accept that for a super su...
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Line 4, column 320, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...er future job especially the education. May be he will choose a dancing profession, af...
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Line 6, column 371, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...er of the subjects, but now, he is just a ordinary man, who works under a boss, w...
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Line 8, column 153, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...creating themselves honestly, according the the rough and tough situations of life. Als...
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Line 8, column 153, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...creating themselves honestly, according the the rough and tough situations of life. Als...
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Line 8, column 237, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...Also, inspire the youngsters to develop a inner soul in the later days, while, yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for instance, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68545994065 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55344651576 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640949554896 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.1008441997 48.9658058833 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.545454545 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6363636364 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 5.45110844103 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156204368645 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562868820631 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262046933673 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809021392113 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169875991865 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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