TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Preparing ourselves to succeed in a future career is a demanding job, and juveniles ought to tolerate enough to put up with the difficulties of such an essential duty. Meanwhile, so many approaches have been propounded to reach the best results in this regard. One of them is the ability to relate well to people, which you should have some vital prequalification. To the best of my knowledge, studying hard is more crucial for success in a prospective job.
Firstly, most of the careers have different requirements, and pupils need to acquire some capabilities during their studies in school. Hence, students to become an expert in their future profession should concentrate on their studying and choose their area of interest precisely by assessing themselves in different subjects. Studying the biography of many successful professionals reveals that they were hard workers and diligent. For instance, I work in a company that designs optimal structures in the context of performance-based design. I optimize the buildings that are designed by other structural engineers. I am capable of carrying out these responsibilities due to the skills which I have achieved during the seismic optimization classes. Our consumers are convinced to trust our optimally designed structures because of their excellent performance, not because of the way the company’s salesman advertise them.
Secondly, In order to solve severe problems in a future job, students must learn how they can be patient and hardworking in different situations. Studying hard has an essential and vital effect on pupils’ diligence. For example, during my studying in school, I had some problems in programming that I could not solve it for several days. After two weeks of hardworking, I found an innovative and new way to handle such programming problems. Therefore, I have learned to be patient in different and unique situations to glorify my capabilities.
Thirdly, there are so many jobs with no particular interaction with other people are required. The skills and abilities are necessities to students for acquiring an opportunity. However, in some cases, students have to well relate to people to have more progress in their careers.
Finally, taking into account the whole reasons given above, I opine that studying hard is essential for success in a prospective profession. Students who are not diligent do not deserve to find a suitable job and to succeed in their careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le job and to succeed in their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, for instance, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30612244898 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13915163049 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543367346939 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9284915307 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0476190476 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191993686732 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583871835844 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511673995117 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12136434155 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447703624702 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.